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AnonymousAnonymousalmost 5 years ago
Exciting buit editing needed!

This has some nice moments in it, TWICE you have Ben's "clock" entering the protagonist. I've got a feeling that that would be REALLY painful. but I'd suggest running a program like Grammerly when you're composing (simple Spellcheck won't capture mistakes like that.

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