All Comments on 'Just One Small Problem'

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nighthawk22204nighthawk22204about 4 years ago
There was an alternative

which any mentally astute lawyer would have seized: upon leaving the water, approaching the ladies, declared to them that this was an official 'Nude Beach, no clothing authorized', putting them on the confused defensive from the onset. But it wouldn't have changed any pf the rest of the story, everything else having a very nice outcum.

Ib_SaysIb_Saysalmost 7 years ago

Was hot but could have used more proofreading, too many typos.

vikingsiddhuvikingsiddhuover 12 years ago
absolutely brilliant

absolutely brilliantly written story!!! there's no other way to describe it. and it's so plausible too.

AnonymousAnonymousabout 17 years ago
Great story

Great story! Well written. Great slow build up to the finale.

SeracaeSeracaeabout 17 years ago
Impressive

Very well written; the shy man gains confidence in a very believable way, even given the unbelievable circumstances. And on top of that, it's just simply hot as hell. Well done!

sirhugssirhugsabout 17 years ago
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I selected this story for a review in the New Story Reviews of the Author's Hangout, Lit Forums.

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