All Comments on 'Karen, Biomechanical Lesbian'

Very good and unusual imagery, but somewhat strange with the cannibalistic behavior (you might want a warning in the future).

Overall you have kick-ass imagination and could really go places with your writing. Ubiquitous101, I truly believe that you have potential.

The reason behind the strangeness is due to the "vore" fanfic that inspired it. Unlike my pseudo-vore story however, the character who was swallowed didn't survive. I don't care much for true "vore", as any erotic story that involves death(especially death by digestion, ick) is a complete turn-off for me. So I wrote the swallowing aspect in in such a way so that the "ingested" character wouldn't die.

Thank you for the praise.