All Comments on 'Karyn's Summer Vacation Ch. 11'

by Missthefriz

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oldbearswitch about 5 years ago

Way to go dude! Reminds me of past fun. Nothing like Dom fun with a Lady whose bitchiness melts away under the heat of a good spanking and hard pounding.

Perhaps the reason the reads drop is it's too many parts? I think your writing is fine, just too long an arc for one series?

A show, I enjoyed it, so thanks!!

Anonymousabout 5 years ago

Far too short

The reason readers are dropping is because, good though it may be, you are just dribbling this story out in little bits.

Try to manage at least two pages at a time and that will hold interest better.

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