All Comments on 'Kat Ch. 01'

There is so much wrong with the premise of this story that I can't even wrap my head around it. There is nothing erotic, safe, sane, or consensual about the deception of a young girl.

You are a good writer, good enough to make this very uncomfortable. It is like watching a slasher flick where you see the bad guy and the victim doesn't. It isn't truly consensual as she doesn't know what Jack is doing. Judging it is difficult, not knowing where you plan to take it.

If you name a story Ch. 01, remember not to disappoint.