by kiwi857
Good premise.
Terrible story.
Lacks details. Nothing about sex here is erotic. Just rushed.
One star.
Really?
“Quote”.
Ahhhhhh. ahhhhh...... ahhhhh. Errrrrr.... Errrrr.
and
Ahhhhh, ah.....Ahhhhhhhhh, ah, errrr. Ah..... Ahhh. Ahh.
“Quote”
I’m sure most readers know the sounds of sex, you don’t need to type it over and over again for every action.
Not sure how to respond to the comments I rec'd on this story??? I wish I could get some reviewers that have actually written some works vs "anonymous" readers that toss out negativity-- especially when the story is rating at 4.3 right now. The first "person" gave me a "1"-- really??
I like input. True I should have left out the weight of the elephant and just said "elephant" or a higher weight-- I mixed up my metaphors-- gorilla vs elephant.
I thought it was a delightful story, loved the premise. Keep up the good work.