by notnamer
I could not even get through this story, it reads like a script, not a story!
i think it's fair to say that i don't understand this story either, nor your other one "The Conversation". but i kind of liked it too; you have a very quirky and unusual writing style. i'm curious to see what happens with the rest of the stories, and how much of the quirkiness is ever explained.
maybe literotica isn't the place for your experimental writings; obviously i don't mind, but you'll probably keep getting abuse from people who just can't handle it.