All Comments on 'Lauren, Four'

Good chapter!

5

Moderately interesting. Guys who order for me at a restaurant without discussing options with me first are a real pest.

Short postings doesn't let the reader get to know the characters. Posted days apart makes it more difficult. As a result, you lose readers and scores as people drift away and score in frustration.

This is going well. Will have to duck into some of your others.

Well written. I admire your vivid and succinct style.

Just a place holder chapter. At least the details of his marriage failure were not excruciatingly detailed. Average stuff. Could have scored better if it was partnered with another chapter that does more to drive the relationship, such as it is, along.