All the other comments are too hard on you. This story was not terrible. I’m not into it but the writing was good and you did a great job!! Keep writing!
Hericles has been into B&D since he was very young, (about 40 years,) happily married, and loves to write. Most of his work is fictional, and is between consenting adults. He can and does write from all perspectives of the Dom/sub relationship.