All Comments on 'Lindsey Ch. 02'

This could be the best story ever written, but I don't have it in me to read 23 pages to find out. Please break it into smaller pieces to give your hard work a chance to be read.

this was a really good story. there were parts that was not needed , don't remember what page towards the end that just went through and described everything that happen so far, the page useless. then, I believe in page 22 where you were telling what happen to PI was very confusing as to who you were talking about. Not enough talking about the daughters control over the mom, or what tiny tits and Jilly twat(slave) was doing while Mistress was spending all the time with "the family" I did give it 4 stars. might have gotten another one if it was chapters instead of pages. as it took me three days to read it. Hope to read more of your work soon BTW my favorite character was Jilly twat, as slave or herself.