All Comments on 'Lisa and Alan... and Gabriel'

I admit it. I am in love with Alan. Well done, Hold

Please write more like this. Well done! I wish I'd been there too.

Wonderful well told story. I hope you write more.

Such an excellent development of the characters here - it has a realistic feel, including the turn-ons Lisa has and your description of the guys' initial embarrassment as well as the fun all three participants had in this episode. My favorite moment in the story is when Lisa suddenly takes her robe off and the two guys see her naked. Yeah, I'm playing naked here really enjoying this one! Thanks. Please write more. The voyeurism and then connecting with each other is a neat combination of themes. Yes indeed.

I enjoyed this first episode in the stories about Lisa. As I understand it from your post on the Story Feedback Forum you have more in store for us. IMO this is a really good "first story" effort and as others have said, hope you add some more.

You did a great job with developing the characters and in particular with taking care of the exposition in a nonobtrusive way. I'm totally not into the two guys together thing, even if they're just jerking off, but I had fun with the story.

Great imagery! Sometimes the best stories leave a bit to your own imagination. Love filling in the blanks. Well done!

I lone the story! Excellent scene description. I’m a voyeur all the way and like MFM. This hits the right spot for me. Outstanding writing skills.

This is dumb. All 3 masturbating when they had a potentially willing woman to rail. Not to my liking.

Bill S.