All Comments on 'Lisa's Impact on Our Lives'

Not bad but needs an editor. Far too many sentences like …

Chris and I went to their bedroom

I love it. Keep going. I want Lisa to subtly get a bit bitchy. Comparing how hard they each make Chris. Comparing the quality of their tits and making Chris judge them. Talking about who he prefers fucking. All in her flirty laughy way, but getting quite nasty with it

A little friendly competition between the girls, Chris is the director and judge. He also becomes more dominant, with jen drinking from the well so to speak, (!)

Perhaps Lisa intentionally leaves her dirty thong for Chris to play with. And it's clear it turns Chris on much more than sex with his gf

Great visuals and dialogue between consenting parties. Jen will lose him soon I’m sure . . . .

This is a very sweet cuckquean story. Unlike other commenters i would like to see Lisa the main controller over both chris and jen with Jen becoming the main submissive. with Chris adding a little dominance over jen only. I really enjoyed how Lisa and Chris received their pleasure from each other as well as jen, but jen had to handle herself while they took pleasure in watching. You did a great job and I hope you are already working on part two. thank you for sharing

Been there done that

When do we get a sequel?

When I find an editor - next couple of chapters are ready to roll.

No editor yet?

Excellent story! I see you have some more chapters. Do you need an editor?

I do need an editor, but haven't received any responses from those I have reached out to.

Just edit it yourself. It's a wank story, not James Joyce. So it has a few typos, who cares? Just post it

The Mods, they care. they keep sending it back. :) Apparently, bad punctuation can mess with people's wank session, kills the mood I guess.

All stories are cleared by moderators. My dialogue has punctuation issues and keeps getting sent back.

Haha, fair enough. Good luck!

I'd like to be the editor that is if you're still searching for one.