All Comments on 'Lucy's Dilemma'

Oh my. I don't know where to begin. I don't want to give you a One Star rating, because I appreciate anyone that tries to write erotica and a one start will make your ratings go down. This is not a good story. This is more an outline for a story for a potential story. It is obvious to me that English is not your first language and that is okay. But you need an editor or proofreader. There is no build up, no character development, too much exaggeration. 6 million dollars? 28DD??? I cannot suspend my disbelief as it is all too outrageous. Please find an editor.

Lucy reluctantly accepts the assignment to save her mother, but then participates with great enthusiasm, despite having to service a 75-year-old fat man. It does not sound believable.

Next story, take more time to develop the plot. You introduce an idea and then race to an unsatisfying finish. You had a kernel of a good story, but didn't flesh it out at all.