All Comments on 'Lyle'

Your writing is good, and you excel at pacing, plot & dialogue. You might consider adding some back story for character development. You seem to start in the middle of a story & the reader has to catch up with hints of back story, but not enough real explanation to fully realize the vision. For instance, what happened to her to give her the PTSD response? Who are these other people she’s sleeping with, if she’s waited forever since she had sex? Why did Kris & Lyle stop seeing each other? These are just some questions you could answer if you wanted to add to this story or those in the future.

Great work though. Really good stuff!