All Comments on 'Magnolia'

5 stars I was laughing so hard I had to use my asthma inhaler.

It read like a classic crime noir, a sib genre I'm especially partial to but with a well placed injection of humour. Great story!

Not much "Loving Wife" in the plot, but a well thought out and well written tongue-in-cheek story to start my day off right!

Blah blah blah, way too much bs.

Thanks for the tags! Didn't have to waste my time reading before giving this a one.

on irony and dark comedy. Congratulations.

But absolutely obnoxious and unreadable. If you actually have a paying job, keep it. Had to skip to last few paragraphs just to find out who killed the bathing beauty. Glad I didn't waste any more time than that, and that was a complete waste.

But can't believe how much time and effort you must have put into this abortion. Yeah, the story deserves analysis for its literature, but you deserve analysis for weirdness. If that makes you happy, I'm not surprised.

Good luck with future efforts.

Well written story thank you

Your mix of wit, sarcasm, tongue in cheeks, and acerbic humor is well above the heads of those making negative comments. Your final twist, that he was being played, was a good kick in the butt for our protagonist!

Excellent story! You took multiple complex threads and intricately wove them together. Well done, FantasyXY!

Does not belong in Literotica. No erotica.

This is a really great story especially the part about an old detective who is ready to retire and then gets showed up by the rookie. Your story writing is great, keep it coming, everyone needs a good laugh during these times.

Oh what fun a hard boiled pulp fiction detective story.

Great job thank you

Lol

As for the anonymous posters I'd bet they never read Sam spade or father brown mysterys

Heavy on bs and light on substance.

Detective Joe should have known Bill wasn’t fresh out of the academy. Detectives are experienced patrol officers that get promoted. They need some experience before becoming an investigator.

Had to read it a couple of times to really understand your humor. It was pretty good though. I especially appreciate the explanation of how the name Literotica was derived. I had no idea.

Wasn't so much a loving wives story but was a good read. Don't know why some commentators are so unhappy with it. 4 stars

Really had trouble reading this. At first I was pleased as it was a crime story. Than as I read I realized it was a bad story regardless of the category it was placed in. Didn't find much I liked about it.

great story, wrong category

no sex, no cheating, no extra marital sex, no getting revenge for extra marital sex,

this should have been in Non-E, or Humor

Would have given this story 4 or 5 stars if it had been in the correct category. Since it was incorrectly posted in LW, only 2 stars.

..looking at the anonys brain dead comments you obviously hit the nail on the head for most of them...very funny that. Thanks for the tale.

Brilliant!!!!

It ain't.

But it was still a hoot!

A 5* read to me, even without sex. I loved the last page when it all came together. I kept waiting for the Rookie to one-up Call-Me-Joe, but it happened several times in one shift. So who really was the Smart One? Maybe there's something to this aptitude thing.

Ok, I didn't want to be too expressive until I passed the "more" button, but here goes: I laughed so hard at your description of Anonny. Then he admitted that he responded to your story by giving you a 1* without ever reading, simply because of the tags. Some fools double down on the social techniques that made them fools, and he will never know.

A complimentary dish of ridicule is served to the Anonny and 1* bombers.

So Sargs real name is Richard and this authors nickname is Sarg and his real name is Richard. Funny a author would use both his nickname and real name in his story.

I thought it was great, a funny, weird, very well written tale. Thanks.

I have to agree with john_sixfooter this was a good story. Thanks for sharing.

A Recursive LW Story!

by using these and with old brains perps and doers are caught. TK U MLJ LV NV

Good story. Thanks for the read! Interesting take on a crime procedural story. Written with tongue securely in cheek and produced more than a few smiles an chuckles.

Nice.

This looked like a typical detective story

up to page 4.

There we were met with the clever thinking

of the writer.

Clever and original.

And a fun ending too.

Well done FantasyXY!

Top ratings from me.

Funny. So how did his partner make out with Miranda?

This should be in humor & satire, not loving wives, regardless of the fact that it is mocking loving wives stories. Also, thank you for wasting ten minutes of my life.

As for actual criticism, Bill's character seems too clueless and stupid to tie his own shoes, much less get through a bachelor's degree at any college, much less get through the police academy pretty much anywhere. I know he is written for "humor," but he is more irritating than amusing.

What a boring read

Worth a chuckle! Thanks!

Nice one! Fun to read, and had a nice take on the Anonymous Cowards. I also liked that it landed in LW, otherwise the target audience would not see it.

Sorry i get the motivation and i het the tongue in cheek plot but this just didn’t t click. The sidebars and the deviations from the story were way too much.

I liked it, well done.

Just another one of the thousands femdom fetish cuck tales.

Hilarious. 5*.