All Comments on 'Mesmerizing Ava Pt. 01'

This was a good start and deserves another chapter.

Off to a good start and looking forward to the next chapter.

I have experienced versions of this so many times. Really good writing.

Not sure if "In your Mind" by "MesmerizingYou" is supposed to be a parody of "Keys to my Heart" by "JukeboxEMCSA", but if it is, you should probably credit the story your referencing in the future.

Otherwise, an entertaining first chapter with only a few minor grammatical errors. A great first step. Looking forward to whatever comes next.

Same, amazing ch and waiting for the next one. ✌️

Liked it a lot. Well written and very sexy. Part 2 please!

great start. for sure would like a part 2.

Thankyou for all your comments and votes, really appreciate the feedback!

@Anonymous Just want to clarify that I haven't read that particular story you just mentioned. But if the reference here seems similar to that one then it is purely a coincidence.

Thanks for suggestions anyway, glad you liked the first chapter!

Please continue the Story. This was a great intro, and I can't wait to see where it goes.

Very nice, let's see what happens in the next part.

Please part 2 ! I want to Know the sequel !!

Enjoyed the story. Please continue a second chapter.

Loved the story! Only thing I'm getting caught on is some of the word choice. Like, "Due to this nature..." just doesn't feel natural in an unprofessional setting (Like in her conscious). Other than that, it was very good. Would love to see more stuff from you!

Great job, looking forward to part 2. Maybe you can get the Ingénue to find out more about herself and her desires.

Very good start, hope you continue.