All Comments on 'Mesmerizing Ava Pt. 01'

Very good start, hope you continue.

Great job, looking forward to part 2. Maybe you can get the Ingénue to find out more about herself and her desires.

Loved the story! Only thing I'm getting caught on is some of the word choice. Like, "Due to this nature..." just doesn't feel natural in an unprofessional setting (Like in her conscious). Other than that, it was very good. Would love to see more stuff from you!

Enjoyed the story. Please continue a second chapter.

Please part 2 ! I want to Know the sequel !!

Very nice, let's see what happens in the next part.

Please continue the Story. This was a great intro, and I can't wait to see where it goes.

@Anonymous Just want to clarify that I haven't read that particular story you just mentioned. But if the reference here seems similar to that one then it is purely a coincidence.

Thanks for suggestions anyway, glad you liked the first chapter!

Thankyou for all your comments and votes, really appreciate the feedback!

great start. for sure would like a part 2.

Liked it a lot. Well written and very sexy. Part 2 please!

Same, amazing ch and waiting for the next one. ✌️

Not sure if "In your Mind" by "MesmerizingYou" is supposed to be a parody of "Keys to my Heart" by "JukeboxEMCSA", but if it is, you should probably credit the story your referencing in the future.

Otherwise, an entertaining first chapter with only a few minor grammatical errors. A great first step. Looking forward to whatever comes next.

I have experienced versions of this so many times. Really good writing.

Off to a good start and looking forward to the next chapter.

This was a good start and deserves another chapter.