All Comments on 'Milking Pat'

Very hot! Keep going with this theme.

Charming premise.

Good build up.

But needs many, many, more details. Description of the blowjob diesn't really say how she blew him.

And she should have played with his cock and balls before using her month. And the playing should have gone into great detail about exactly what was donr. And how he reacted to it. And how she reacted to his reaction/s. Dialog during the playing/blowing would have helped too. Did he like it? Was there something he'd prefer? Would he like more? Was he going to cum soon?

Ditto the eating of her pussy. Needed many more details, but in reverse. And why not give her an orgasm or two before the cock entered her pussy?

Four stars.

Not bad but just something in the way that you have written this is just off, it’s to do with the third and first person, but sorry I just can’t put my finger on what I see as off, liked the idea though

Good premise.

But rushed.

Just a laundry list of actions. Not told erotically.

Three stars.