All Comments on 'Minni Vacation'

Wow, what a very hot story. I would love to read more. Maybe when they get home, they fine a swinger's club there and start having fun with others.

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Call the lawyers. This marriage is over, they just don't know it yet.

The repeated "my wife". What, she doesn't have a name?

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Also, pick of tense. You randomly switch between past and present tense.

5 Stars! Very hot! Please let them go back.

A VERY FUN, AND DEEPLY EROTIC STORY!

Good story but you need an editor.

Nice idea, and an enjoyable read. The text was a little stilted and didn’t flow well, partly because of the mix of tenses. Avoid present tense as it’s difficult to use successfully and spoils readability. If you have Welsh ancestry you need to add Wales to your spell checker and avoid writing about large marine mammals.

"I kept thinking how much fun we had with Cindy. I also kept thinking how beautiful you are and how I wanted to taste my second pussy. So, if you are interested, I am here and ready." My wife told Janis.

Cindy parted her legs and told my wife, "Get your fucking face down there and go to work."

Um, which is it? Cindy? Or Janis?