All Comments on 'Model Slave Pt. 03 Ch. 04'

Excellent buildup to the auction, beautiful descriptions of Emma’s emotions as they swirled around her brain. The introduction of the dark stranger interrupted the flow as I wondered, wait a minute, what dark stranger? I read back to see who she meant, but couldn’t find any mention. Perhaps it had been removed during editing however it was a major distraction making the whole abduction unclear to me. Was it the high bidder or someone else? Wasn’t Steve supposed to be sitting in the chair, but wasn’t he on stage? The ending felt forced and although I reread it several times, many of the pronouns were vague and open to interpretation. I look forward to your next submission when I’m sure much will be revealed. Thank you for sharing your talents with us.