All Comments on 'More than Mr. Mom'

A simple solution to your Dilemma write the third chapter.

Really am loving this story. But Kate has still got away with it lightly. So please please write more of this story it just starting to get juicy need more lol . You are a very very talented writer and I’m sure that you will come up with something good . Because we are only at part 2 I need at least another 12 parts ( lol only joking 😂) do as many as you can but definitely need another chapter. Because Chris has only semi retired and Kate still thinks she’s all that still so something has got to happen. I’m mean Chris is on this holiday for a year thing with Lydia. But hey something can happen in that year lol . I know deep down that someone will give you a fantastic idea because there are fantastic talented writers and readers on this site what can help . So yes don’t you dare stop writing this fantastic story I want more please.

Kudos 5* for the second chapter well executed! I think Kates story is not so much as "I watched my sisters hooking up every night on the ship" but, why did she insist on going in the first place?

In fact, chapter 2 was the mistake. I’m talking about the cheap, old trick of yanking the parentage of one of the kids from Mr. Mom. Invented drama that served no purpose. You have his wife seemingly doing a 180 in morals for no reason. After all, you went to great pains to portray Kate as the levelheaded, virtuous one of the three sisters given all her speeches about fidelity and exclusivity before they got together in chapter 1. There has to be more than a simple case of “monkey see - monkey do.”

Kate needs to explain herself.

Definitely another perspective and response is required to provider the other sides view point. So far Kate's views / explanation or such have not been vocalized.

Every author at Literotica should have to write at this level or better. The only problem would be having to wait for months on end for submissions that qualify!

One bone to pick; these are short stories, and readers often don’t pay close attention to the name of each named character, so please cut us a little slack and deep six the alliteration. I will assume you did it on purpose, just to be funny, so I don’t expect you change a thing(because you are right, it is funny)

The beginning with the daughters was great, then the ending was really disjointed. You went from the confrontation with Kate to the husband driving around in a motor home.

What happened with Karla after her graduation? Are all three daughters disowning their mother now? How did Kate react to being hated by all three girls? Did Kate try to "make this right"? Who was Karla's biological father? Why did Kate think that her ex-husband was Karla's dad if she'd been sleeping around?

I like a happy ending for the betrayed husband, but narrating it in the epilogue just meant it felt tacked on. We didn't learn anything about Lydia and suddenly he was fucking her in a lake! Was Lydia a blonde or brunette? Petite, athletic, or statuesque? How old was she if she was retiring? 65? He was only 52... Ew!

You finished it pretty well, but Kate did not suffer nearly enough. It wasn't a surprise that he wasn't Karla' father, that was clearly telegraphed. Please do write Kate's story, but let her suffer more pain, if nothing more than from being completely cut out of her daughter's lives. Grandpa can be proud that his granddaughters are everything his daughters were not. Pops is responsible for that.

please do not write a third chapter it will ruin the story

To late to do anything about the kid, and she is daddies little girl. May favor part is when she asked to talk. He had said it all and their was nothing that could be done for redemption To as she says make it right.

Leave it as it is. The graduation ceremony was perfect. Kate was thoroughly humiliated and publicly exposed for what she was, by her own daughter. Nuff said!

Great approach. No over the top revenge scheme, he just told his daughter a truth she really needed to know.

Forget the cheating wife's story. Who cares about a cheater's POV?

Good one but it just seemed unfinished. I think your idea to write this from Kate pov is a good one.

Good end for Mr Mom...

I wouldn't write a chapter 3 if you have to force it.

Maybe later the idea will come later, but I think its a good story as it stands

ive not left a comment or a score on any stories for ages,, but i feel this deserves a 10, great writing, a great story,, very well put togeather, this could have been a lot longer, a lot more detailed, sort of book length, (if that makes sense ) and it would still have been a great book to read, , thanks for writing and sharing this,,

I think that you should continue the series giving us your reading public an introspection of how a good wife becomes a round heeled slut after having stated she was not like her sisters, "You also need to know that I'm not a slut. I'm far from being a virgin, but I've only had sex with guys I'm exclusive with. It's not that many men." so nine years after the first that first cruise they are still married, but not for long. Also in first story I find it hard to believe that a four and two year old could clean up the table after Kate went on her first cruise, it was just a small slip because nine years later in the next several paragraphs set the cheating tale on kitchen table so to speak.

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What consequences did the wife suffer as a result of the revelation about her youngest daughter?

How about from her perspective from the moment her daughter reacted to her at the graduation ceremony! It was a good story. Thanks for writing it.

Your story here and chapter one are your path to take. I say write a third if you feel you can or want to try and experiment. The mother's path is really finished and yes, I would like to see it finished, but I will respect you even if you don't write it.

I have enjoyed the two stories in this series thus far.

Why not make an interspersed story? Continue how this goes, throw in a little backstory for the wife, how things crashed and burned for her after the fuck you at graduation and how she was left in the cold by everyone, of course you summed things up eloquently but everyone loves to see a fire burn

Most stories have some unresolved issues that don’t necessarily need to be explored. Kate’s road to becoming a slut falls in that category for this story line in my estimation. If you really want to explore that question I’d suggest writing a completely different story starting with with that issue and carry it through to a logical conclusion. I would prefer that the characters in the story be different that those in More Than Mr Mom. That’s my 2 cents worth. Thank you for a well constructed and well written story.

"I don't know what I've done wrong to deserve three sluts as daughters."

Damn. Bad enough that Kate did what she did to her own family, but even her parents can't hide the shame of having her as a daughter. Worst, all of George's children are faithless sluts... How can you live down the fact that you may be, in some ways, responsible in raising promiscuous and untrustworthy women? There's probably something defective inside Kate, Jan and Mickie, but something else must have happened in their upbringing for all of them to be acting this way. It would be surprising to hear that their own mom is a slut - 'doesn't sound like George would tolerate such nonsense. So... what the fuck is wrong with those women? If you gonna write a follow-up to this, author, at the very least, try to answer this question with something more deep than "well, my sisters were having sex all the time, so I got curious..." as an explanation.

I find it quite surprising that no mention of Kate was said after her plead 'to make this right.' I guess it was the way the author let her know that the whole Harrington clan erased her from their mind and their lives - hell, I bet her own father did the same. It would be fun to learn how's she coping with being estranged from most of her family.

Yeah, I wrote 'fun.' It's fun to read about miserable people, having a miserable existence.

Ultimately, I very much like this follow-up, but boy is it sad! You got to feel bad for Chris - sure, karma bite him in the ass, but it's not like he continuously needed to be punish for his earlier bad decisions; you feel even worst for his daughters, who really didn't sign up to have an unredeemable slut as a mom; and now, you have to feel awful for George and his wife, who have undeniable proof they were complete failures as parents. Eeech... Sure, life moves on, and you move on with it, but those are the things that will keep you awake at night, making you wonder again and again "were did I fucked up?"

Best story of the day. Thanks for the share, author.

so far the story is good. little bit going fast but thats ok. the problem is it never shows the mother and wife is regretting her actions, suffering the loss of her family. I think you need to show that.

You have done so well its first first two chapters I believe the next chapter (or more?) should be solely yours. However you decide, I definitely want to see where you take it. Kate fate must, and hopefully, will be addressed. As well as the direction of the daughters and their family’s.

With your final comment; "this is a porn site and my most recent posts have had very little sex. What to do?" is incorrect.

This is an erotic site, the sexual content can range from negable to excessive and anywhere in between. If the story is good as this one is, it does not need gratuitous sex to spice it up. Thank you for Mr. Mom I enjoyed it!

A testament to your willingness to consider. The MC was young so him continuing to have sex with the sisters after they got married was not totally unexpected. I think it just reduces his moral authority a bit. However, real people are flawed and hypocritical so really having the MC a bit tarnished makes him more relatable (to me anyway)

In the end this is your story and you don't have to apologize or even admit mistake. I like you. I hope you stick around

Please no dumb 3rd chapter... It might completely overshadow all before!

vbr & 5*

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I’d love to hear Kate’s side of the story. I’ve been intrigued with this story and wondered whether, in real life, the mother and daughter could ever reconcile. What could Kate do to ameliorate the relationship? What happens to Kate’s career, if anything, when the truth comes out?

Thanks for the 5 star story whatever your decision.

. . . how many kids ever really hate their mothers, even in situations like this? Not many, especially daughters, I would guess.

Rather, too many divorced parents use the kids as weapons against each other. This story is the too common fantasy of injured fathers, not anything approaching reality.

Not only was it a well executed revenge by the one ultimately wronged, Karla, but it was done in a manner that Kate cannot spin. Loved it.

Also, on a personal thanks, this is the first time I have been mentioned in a tale on this site. Thank you for the shout-out.

5/5

I wouldn't bother reading it for a start.

It's funny... I love sex, but I often find myself skipping the sex scenes in the stories. It's usually just the same old lick, suck, 5 amazing orgasms and the taking of her final virginity.

The exception is blackrandi's stories. She seems to make my brain heat up so much my eyes steam.

I know it sounds funny, but I come here for the storylines.

She will die alone

How would you explain the youngest daughter not being his. I think you should just leave this story as is. I thought that him finding a good faithful woman should have happened sooner but it’s your story. The father of her youngest was never revealed and delt with. Maybe her loosing her position for moral reasons.

Good story . I prefer these stories with less or no sex. More of a impact

I don't think Karla's parentage would have affected custody of the other girls. He had custody for good reasons, those reasons didn't change. Given how long he had been raising Karla, he might have still gotten custody of her. The courts have plenty of choice, and Karla not being his biological daughter would just be another strike against his wife.

He should tell the older girls first, so that if Karla comes running to them, they'll know what it's about.

I was glad that Karla didn't let her maternal grandparents walk off in shame.

NOW she wants to "make this right?"

I didn't see Kate hit bottom. Would have like to see the fall-out from the confrontation at the graduation.

Thank you for a great story and a wonderful follow up. I think that you should leave the story as it stands and not bother with part 3 (Kate's perspective) as I feel it would only try to put her in a better light than she ever deserves. She made her choices when she had everything going for her and chose the wrong path, and that was well documented in the two parts of this story, so as the saying goes let sleeping dogs lie.

Rgds Al

Stay true to the story and don't publish a third chapter. It's not hard to figure out Kate's motivation and having a story related to that just to submit a story with sex defeats the purpose.

Congrats on the other two chapters! They were well written!

This is a porno site and lately most stories have very little sex in them and a lot of drama and fairytale endings. Not very exiting and boring to read.

I didn’t like this second part of your story but read it all so that means you kept my attention. Thank you.

Thanks!

Not a writer but, I would say this story is complete. It is well written and I really don't care to hear what Kate's motivations were.

I have just read the two Mr Mom stories back to back, and your final paragraph suggested a Chapter 3. I havre one word - Don't. The way the story ends is a little abrupt but anything from Kate's point of view now would only spoil what you have already written. Please consider this finished

While most say don't write chapter 3, I think it's needed. I'd like to read how it started. Why she did it. Her motivation. What happened after the divorce. To tie up the loose ends in my mind. This series is an enjoyable read.

Don't do a ch 3 from Kate's side that ttys to explain why she did it as their isn't an excuse for doing something like that knowing how it would hurt her family, I always find it disappointing when authors add sections justifying why it was done. If you do a ch 3 do it about what happened after graduation as that's got potential for the btb tribe as it sounds like she's lost her relationship with her parents and potentially her job as a lot of education jobs contqin some morals clauses.

Great story with a lot of joy!

One change I would recommend: sit down with the ex under the condition that she hand over the daughters diploma and find out who the sperm donor is. The daughter may someday need that information, although I'll bet the ex doesn't know.

Go for it! We know that you will make it seamless. Tell us how Kate became such a slut and why it took 9 years to come to light.

Why not? It can be done well. She was a cunt. Sometimes that makes for an excellent story. But it's way harder to do well.

You can always try. Doing the same old thing, with the same ol' morality. I mean, what is the reasoning behind this hyper morality on this site anyway?!

give it a whirl, you don't ever have to actually publish it...but try to find some BELIEVABLE story to tell from her perspective.

His wife went on a cruise with two slut sisters, both of whom he'd banged early and often. He tells her he is uncomfortable with it and she should not go. Nine months later they have a kid. No suspicions from the husband. The next eight years fly by with her going on a cruise with her slut sisters every year. Luckily, no more children are conceived. He is happy as a pig in shit until he overhears his wife talking about getting an STD from some asshole on the cruise. Suddenly, he is indignant and wants a divorce? He had to be smacked over the head with a 2 x 4 to figure out what was going on? How did he raise three sharp girls? Maybe they took after their mom, except for the family slut gene? This guy is not the sharpest tool in the shed. His late life romance add-on seemed like an afterthought to appease the "happily ever after" fans.

All of that said, I look for your stories and read them all. You are quite good.

You don't need a third chapter. It's best to stop after you finished the job.

A chapter from Kate's POV would be nothing but self serving rationalizations for her cheating. Just let it go.

For a sex-filled sequel, tell us more about Chris's life after his last daughter goes out on her own. Life on the road, a series of erotic encounters eventually leading to his romance with Lydia and their happily ever after. You can insert tidbits about the continuing downward spiral of Kate's life as sidebars, things he hears about from friends back home.

Don’t feel pressured to sex it up for the sake of doing so. Some of the best stuff on Lit, and in LW is very light on sex. Read Todd172’s stuff for a great example - his stories could run on a PG-rated fiction site, or be published mainstream.

Other than the discovery that his youngest daughter wasn't his biological child (saw that one coming), nothing happened. His ex wife is further vilified and everyone hates her now, but she still keeps her job and her life goes on. Hubby semi-retires and travels around. So what?

2 stars

Don’t start the chapter with her beginning to be a slut. Start it at the end of graduation and her life after the confrontation in the gym.

Even by graduation, she is already an old used up slut. Now everyone one knows it.

I think chapter 3 would be a challenge. I think it is something you should try.

I got power, I felt entitled, I ate my cake and kept it too. I didn't respect my husband, family, or relationship. I was stupidly selfish, eventually got burned, and still kept my position.

Except for keeping her position, Kate is a standard boilerplate LW story. There's no need to rehash things from her point of view.

My complements on writing two very good "Mr. Mom" stories.

I liked this story even better than the original. I do wonder how “the mother Kate” survived the graduation scene. There had to be some fall out. Thanks for sharing. Top marks.

Since the youngest daughter was not her husband's. She was cheating before the first cruise. Using the premise that she saw her sisters having sex on the cruise would not work. She had been cheating for years before that.

Personally, I rarely like stories that have a version from the wife's (or the cheater's) POV. Ultimately, it doesn't matter.

The wife said she wasn't a whore when they were exclusive, and she wouldn't tolerate his playing. The readers originally assumed that the whoring started with the cruises, as it was implied by the sisters. But now we know there was at least one other moment of infidielity before then. Was it a drunken 'mistake'? Was she raped and/or blackmailed? She did initiate? It doesn't matter.

It's assumed she didn't know the MC wasn't the father, but her reactions weren't from someone that was drugged and wouldn't remember. And there were no hints that something bad happened to her.

We don't need to know why the whore was a whore. The MC got his happy ending, and that's what we (me) wanted.

Thanks for the story!

Nicely paced and good characters, mostly believable and it is a story. (Please ignore condescending comment from HDK finishing with 'you're quite good' ....he used to be)

I like all your work and really appreciate what you and others offer here.

Go for it.

This was an enjoyable read and something to tie up the lose ends might be good to read.

I only question I have was where was her downfall and what did it entail. Other than having it announced in the huge group setting there was nothing to that affect.

This chapter was thin.

‘Girl flips off mom’

So what is the next? ‘Lady watches sisters fuck’?

Kate is so mis-understood as she really loves her husband and only wanted one week a year, only one week a year! Then after being discovered as a cheating slut for nine years and bringing home an STD and another mans baby she has the audacity to address her husband with.

As Chris turned and started to walk through the crowd of gawkers, Kate cried out, "Please Chris. We have to make this right."

Sounds like a pitch for the Doctor Who Time Machine!

Can you actually write a third chapter that makes Kate look sane?

Story made no sense from first chapter. He's about to divorce her for going on the cruise. She comes home pregnant, gives birth 9 months later and he has no curiosity? What happened there?

It's odd being upset at Kate for Karla's genetics. After all if Kate hadn't screwed around on that ship then Karla wouldn't have life, the sisters wouldn't have Karla as their sister, and the MC wouldn't have his third daughter that he loved so much.

I was thinking this the whole time, so definitely agree with what George said that if things happened exactly as they did he wouldn't have his three granddaughters he loved so much. Not suggesting any of them go and congratulate Kate for fucking around on that cruise and getting pregnant, but just a weird concept to be additionally pissed at her for getting pregnant.

No need for a third chapter, it would only detract from an excellent story

One of my absolute favorite authors! Many comments call out threads that might be followed. It doesn’t have to be simply the “slut’s” POV. What happened with Karla? What about consequences for Kate, etc.?

Good story as is........ but it could be great. Thank you for writing.

Chapter 3 would be appreciated.

Don’t listen to anyone unless they say, “Great story!”

Great story!

Its medically and physically dangerous, degrading, and in the end humiliating. Less is more. Let this story, and this whore, lay where it lies. Kate never exhibited the slightest contrition, remorse, or regret. Let her wallow in her own filth, in private.

Thanks for your time and talent.

As much as this pains me to say......but BTB!

Please, NO RAAC. I usually like those but it would ruin this very good story.

Yeah, but most LW fans are here for emotional porn to enjoy the cheating bitch/bastard's life turn to shit

Let me add my vote for a chapter three, and a lot of humiliation and anguish for Kate. This chapter just write her out after the graduation snub.

Some writer seem to write an extra chapter from the cheater's point of view that never seems to me to add much and is usually a letdown. Some people who liked the original story seem to like such things just because they get the story again, but imo you're best off creating the next one. (I did like this story, btw.)

Unless you find some character, personality or thought insights that you feel are important enough to write about, I think your story is best left as is. Just adding the cheater telling the same story would be a waste of your time and ours.

Stop. Simply stop.

It’s done. Good story

A Jeep Wrangler would not be great for anything but the lightest of travel trailers and would not be practical for what he ended up doing @3500 pounds towing,full size pickup would be better.

The one hole in the ending is with Kate, we find out that despite what she said going into the marriage she has been cheating early on,it wasn't just on the cruise.We never find out why,was she like that when they married, did George make them do a pre nup bc he knew how Kate was? What was the real story? Was she always a slut or bc did Mickie and Jan pressure her? Doesn't add up. And what happens to Kate? Does she become a leper and ends up.old and alone,ostracized,or is she the happy slut? In some ways Kate is the cardboard slut, not much depth to her. A third chapter might be interesting but if it is written as erotic fiction recounting her sordid past yuck. Maybe she meets a guy she actually likes and wants to be with,but realizes she needs to come clean about her past and how she finally got herself straight....honestly given how sordid it all was hard to believe her character without the why;I am sure the misogynist Bible thumpers will tell you she is a daughter of Eve,natural.sluts,etc, bit for normal people it is q big hole to fill.

This is a classic case of how NOT to handle such a situation. No-one gains and everyone suffers just so he can get some measure of revenge. Try manning up, you baby.

@njlauren Re: "A silly comment" - It wasn't a Jeep Wrangler pulling a travel trailer, it was a motor home pulling the Jeep!

I only gave You 4 Stars as I never found out who the Bio Father was ..

You can't keep something like that secret once your child is ready to leave the nest. It's potentially important medical information.

A good follow up to Mr. Mom.

Reading comments, I'm amazed

by the interest in the slut.

My vote is against writing Kate's story.

I just couldn't care less.

What I do care for, is how this writer

addresses the sluts.

The "In your face" attitude is refreshing.

No talks to let the slut vent.

No telling the children to love their slut mother.

Why show respect to someone

who doesn't deseve it?

Some writers here might want to

consider that option.

Some stories don't need a BTB,

but all can use some strong reaction.

This story, as the first part, was right up my alley.

Both get top ratings from me.

You can go a few ways in how you tell Kate's story.

1) you can paint her like a comically evil villain that doesn't really care about anything except getting dicked.

2) you can tell the story in 2 chapters. First with the whole cheating thing. And maybe gloss over it as she acknowledges that it happened. And then have the time after the divorce and her trying to come to terms with destroying her marriage and how her children has reacted, and her trying to become a better person, only to be slapped in the face with the truth about the youngest parentage.

3) you can make it a fap story where you graphically describe the gangbangs and tell a story about a woman that was always just as much a slut as her sister but tried to suppress as much as she could until the first cruise. And then just let go on every cruise from then on.

At last a “proper” story with believable characters, thank you.

This was a well-done story, like many of yours. I would have liked to read the "discussion" between Kate and Chris, to see how you might handle that.

There are several ways a discussion or Kate's point and rationale might be but would it be that she was "simply" too affected by her loving sisters?

What the hell, try it!

T.T.

Enjoyed that. Don't really see a need for Kates story though.

Not sure it was worth the extra chapter. Daughter finds out her father isn't her actual father, and her revenge is flipping off her mother in public. About a 2 out of 10 on the

"Kate gets hers" scale.

You mentioned the possibility of having a subsequent story from Kate's perspective beginning with:

'The only story line I can come up with is - "I watched my sisters go to their staterooms with different men every night and wanted to give it a try." It seems dumb.'

I think so....Karla, the youngest, was already about 5 yrs old when the cruise idea gets pushed onto Chris. So, she's already begun cheating, only until now she gets caught. If you're going to do the sequel, maybe re-think the timeline and 'wanted to give it a TRY"' idea.

Kate was not developed very much in Ch1. Sweetie got even less development in Ch2. Ch1 deserved a five, and I awarded it, but it did not fulfill my additional criterion for LW. Namely, that the change in the the marital relationship should be a focus. In this case, there were two aspects of Sweetie’s adventurous conduct, the more interesting one being delayed for 17-18 years. The first aspect (to become known) was settled by Hubby clearly, but without much Sweetie interaction. The parentage aspect only had a quick and dirty act by the affected party. There was also no reported BtB component provided beyond that highly embarrassing scene.

Gots to drop down to a 4*

Good story. Good writing. You told it all as far as I'm concerned. Personally, I probably wouldn't read Kate's perspective. I know WHAT happened and how it ended. I really don't care WHY.

Now if you want to start a new story (with or without more sex?) I'll look forward to reading every word.

Actually, I don't read these stories for the porn. I read them to see the interaction between a husband and a wife that strays, whether it be a one time occasion or a long affair. I generally skip over or scan the sex scenes.

What interests me is the tolerance or lack of tolerance of the husbands and how many seem to be willing to try an patch things up, when it is the wife that has broken the marriage contract.

I don't understand how a husband can be content with staying in a marriage just because the wife, After Being Caught, agrees to be monogamous. My own logic is that if she strayed, I don't want her back and perhaps I'm not the best choice for her anyway. I liked this story as Kate was never asked if she'd START being faithful.

She broke her vows - the contract is Void.

Karla found out that she wasn’t a biological daughter of her mother’s husband. Karla is now pissed off at her mom. Well if her mum had not cheated on her husband and got Pregnant with Karla, KARLA would never have been born! Karla should be thanking her lucky stars that her mother did cheat on her husband! Some people are really dumb!

Continue the story please. 5 stars already for both chapters. Tks for writing.

If Kate had been having sex with her husband at the moment of conception Instead of some nameless dick, Karla would still have been raised by the same parents (mostly her dad) would still have had the same childhood and would still have absorbed the same values from her dad (because she certainly didn't share her mother's, which we saw when the truth was revealed to her). In every way that really matters, she'd still be the same Karla. That's clearly how her dad sees her as still his daughter, so there's no reason why she should feel any differently.

You got away adding this chapter through good writing and sticking to the script from the hubby's POV.

Don't spoil by changing to the wife side of the story. Never works. Never want to hear the cheater's side unless the innocent spouse was beating her physically or mentally. This was not t h e case in this story.

Keep doing what you're doing. Great story!

... it will actually advance the story. Summary so far: The mom goes on a singles cruise with her slut sisters over her husband's strong objections. She does the trips eight more times. Each time, he is so mad, he refuses sex for a whole two weeks. Finally, he gets a clue and divorces a woman who at no time demonstrates love or respect. Later, he finds out that the daughter born exactly nine months after the first trip has another sperm daddy. Everyone is wicked angry. Dad retires.

You are so right about some being dumb as rocks, for an explanation I suggest reading sdc97230's comments from 2/18/20. I think they are aimed directly at you. My best to three daughters who learned not to take any shit, George who I feel the most empathy for, a high school principal who took some good advice and an ex-husband who saw no reason to talk to Kate. Signed: BTW

Great Story. Thoroughly enjoyed and did not matter not enough porn. Keep on writing.

Decent story,would like more in order to see if Kate knew who Karla's father was.As for the sex content there is some at the story end and another story doesn't need graphical sex to be listed here.