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AnonymousAnonymousover 1 year ago

Suggestions. You need to give the reader a taste of what the story is about- at the very beginning and not go on with this storytelling without dialog as if the reader already knew the characters and wanted all of these other circumstantial detail. This is a sex story, after all, no?

mercurialgentlemanmercurialgentlemanover 1 year agoAuthor

Yes, you make a very valid point. It's for one particular person, but I'll remain mindful, remove more of the "storytelling" on this platform. You will have the same observation on the next chapter. I'll be more mindful of the sexual element moving forward. Appreciate the feedback.

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