by Jennybigboobs
Story, syntax, tenses, grammar, and flow are all getting better and better with each chapter! Really enjoying it, and proud of Jenna for having self-respect and demanding that her mate respects her also. So many stories are all: "We're destined mates and that's that. All is forgiven and forgotten." And suddenly the feisty heroine becomes a door mat. Can't wait to see how the story continues!
OOFETH! CANT WAIT TO READ THE NEXT ONE!
Don't stop writing! I love this story so much and I can't wait to find out more
A read over when you're ready to post wouldn't hurt, but the story is enjoyable
the writing itself is poor. You used lots of disjointed, run on sentences and the writing just felt awkward. Perhaps an editor would help, or more practice studying conversational English.
Please keep writing I’m hooked and need to know more! Yes and editor eoukd help, but your story has great potential!
The story is too enjoyable! I want to know the rest!
Please don't concern yourself with grammar so much! It's decent!
I prefer MORE new chapters, not well written ones!!
When's the next chapter coming out?? This always happens, u get the reader into the story and it takes forever for the author to get the next chapter. This story is so good 👍👍👍.
Please this story is very good and different. Please post
MORE CHAPTERS
M hooked to the storyline.. please release the next chapter soon.. please
I check back often on this story. I love the imagery & think it is pretty unique in this category. Not the usual predictable take or the same typical plot. I really enjoy the style & hope you post more soon!
You mentioned in your profile that you’re working on a new story. Could I respectfully request that you finish this story as well? I really enjoy it and would like to see how they sort things out between them
Why do I keep finding stories that I love with great characters and plot, but then they just end and I'm left hanging with another abandoned story?