by DrewBlueMN
It has a taste of love and when you are in love you wholdnt let your love to go away
Someone else already commented that this isn't a story, but merely an outline for one. I have to completely agree. Not much thought or effort was exerted to create this "one-page wonder". 🤔 What was the point of the 15 year age gap between the siblings? Instead of 45/30, if you made them 20/18 it has virtually no impact on the story beyond the big brother babysat and bottle fed his sister.
A whole lot of unexplored potential here. 2/5