by Writer71
He's 19 and in HS? Crying because he's being teased, at 19? How does that qualify as normal? And don't even get me started on the poor writing and laughable premise...
Please write in your native language at least until you learn English.
Interesting concept! I think it's a very good starter story & great writing. I'm looking forward to the next chapter.
Not bad needs some editing still and to short I'd like a little more wind up to get to know the characters