All Comments on 'My Wife's Surprise'

We always need new writers which is why I am taking the time to comment, in a constructive way. The fact you have zero Followers after 3 published stories is a tell that you are not striking the chords.

Your characters have NO flesh on their bones at all. It's hard to care about any of these ghosts. Who were these people? Why on earth were 3 men upstairs naked waiting to come down later?? You could make use of a volunteer proof reader, as well. Do keep 'em coming.

Loved it.

-26thNC Approved

I love this story. It's my dream and fantasy to watch my wife get fucked by many well-hung men in front of me. One difference is that I would fluff their cocks and get them ready to fuck my wife. Then, after they fuck her, they would get behind me and fuck my sissy man-pussy deep and hard. They would shoot their 2nd load into my ass while I was eating their 1st load from my wife's cunt. That would be heaven.

I can't wait to read more of your stories. These first ones are great.

Loved it.

-26thNC Approved

This was enjoyable! I noticed you posted three stories at the same time, but nothing since. Why have you stopped? I can see some grammar errors here, but that is easily fixed. If you want, I would volunteer to proofread some of your future stories. I can tell English is a second language, and would like to help you make your submissions better. If you're interested, send me a message. And whatever you do, keep writing!

no love, just fucking, cheating slut and sissy wimp husband. The three men should have fucked his sissy ass and mouth as well!