by silverlicker
Come on CH. 3 please, or as many as is needed to finish the story.
Why? To piss off your skanky ass, that's why. 1* - to piss you off further
WTF are you still reading?
Glad you didn't rush to tell everything in the first paragraph of the first chapter. A little story, a little sex... More chapters please1
All options are still open...What really happened, how will he react, how will she react...so 2* for now
The fact that your two offerings end with no god seque I'm sorry to get be it a 3 star rating. If it has a emotional, dynamic, and creative ending I could jump to a 5.
Thanks for sharing your efforts.
who isn't. Why in the heck do you need somebody else to sexually demonstrate on your wife what you should be doing; then explain to you how to do it so you can go home and experiment? Are as inept in bed as you are at writing? The cucks must love theses stories of yours, while the BTB's want your man card back. Me? I just want the series to end none of your characters is worth a damn.
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I hate to discourage but start reading novels by good writers or classic authors, let that sink in. If you then feel capable, you still need to get an editor who will probably have an impossible task on their hands but the final product will be better than this.
. . . but the writing is so terrible, it's hard to read. Forgive me for saying this, as I appreciate the efforts of all the authors on this site, but you must consider getting an editor to smooth your atrocious writing. I'll still read the next installment, simply out of curiosity. Thanks.
The cheating started with the emotional cheating. Getting close talking about sex is where it went to cheating. The kissing, feeling sucking and all that is definitely divorce. The emotional part might be enough for me to leave but some might think that's extreme. Also finding out many years later would make it worse for me and same as hubby the fact that people knew and talked about it would piss me off even more. He should bring the guy home one night and say look I bumped into an old friend just to torcher her before you divorce her
However, sucking another man to completion, spitting it out or not, seems like cheating to me. Pretty well told story, though.