All Comments on 'My Wolves Ch. 03'

I'm curious as to how old you are. This seems as if it was written by someone in high school. Poor grammar and punctuation.

Don't listen to the commenter below. This story is perfect as is, and the only I have is is being waaaaaayyyyy too short, but other than that it's freaking perfect. I am loving every word of this tale. Keep writing.

I think your story would definitely be helped by an editor, off the top of my head there were mistakes like saying "wad" instead of "was". Or "trough" instead of "through" and sentences like: "Lucien managed to support us both and stopping from either of us from falling." A good editor would pick up mistakes like that and help you clean it up and make it a lot slicker. I'm not trying to castigate you because we all make these mistakes. However I think your story would be much improved with someone casting another eye over it. Saying that I'm still reading at chapter 3, so I obviously like it!

To that hater comment: go stab yourself with a spoon.

nice work luv keep it going :)

First of all i liked it but an editor would be helpful but its still easy to read so no biggy. other then that too short take your time and flesh it out more.

Its good ,just to short

...but I agree that the story appears to have been written by someone young. There is an obvious lack of character development & lack of grammar & spelling improvement. It is hard to get invested in the story when there isn't a reason to care. Good luck with the remainder of the story, but I won't be reading any more.

can't wait for more

It's starting to read just like the Blade movies just take out vampires and insert warewolves! Plus two swords rather than one!

Longer is better but you do end and great cliffhangers. Keep on writing. Looking forward to more chapters.

So many people put their half finished stories in Literotica and leave the readers hanging. Shameful really.