All Comments on 'Natalie Ch. 04'

I guess after a convo with Conall and the council Natalie is gonna be ready to whip some ass. Ha! Or at least in the future when it all falls into place after some drama you give us. I like this story. Thanks for the late night read.

Think you could spoil us! Love the story, looking forward to the next post!!!

Thank you for your gift.

but u need an editor

interesting turn i am looking forward to reading more

Do you not listen to your readers?!!! You need an editor or like someone stated in your last chapter write it walk away come back a few days later read it out loud and update parts. This is what makes or breaks writers when they don't listen to their readers. Good story but you need an editor.

@msnj

i did actually use an editor for 3 and 4. Since I was working on a paper for my Marketing class I made the mistake of allowing them to post it for me. A lot of good that did because there were more errors with the editor then without. So it's not that I didn't listen I just trusted the wrong person.

Interesting story. Keep writing and searching for the right editor.

Not surprised Crandle is the dark Were....knew it...felt it!!!! Witches don't curse for nothing regardless of culture and historical misrepresentation.

The ancestral blood knowledge calls to Natalie and through the dreams I see her coming into awareness of her power. The dreams are the key to her armaments. The dark Were will remain bound. Her mate is the other significant piece.

Can't wait.....too excited!!!!

I'm sorry if this has been said before but you need to learn the difference between except and accept.. Except: not including, other than,with the exclusion of, ie "I will have everything except that."... Accept: to take or receive, to agree or consent to, ie "I will accept you invitation."

I don't mean to sound critical but it is a bit off putting. Other than that, I hope you write some more. It's getting really good.

i dont know any thing about u r writing skills and mistakes but the story is awesome and i urge u to go on

you are getting better in every chapter hope the next one is great

write faster pleasssseeeee need to know what happens so bad.

please finish this story:) and do hurry!!!

Even though there are a few errors, it is a great story. I enjoyed it and I would love it if you finished it or maybe a chapter 5?

I hope that your next chapter comes.soon!!

cant wait for the next chapter.

Found your stories. Great, entertaining stuff. Please come back and finish the tale. Please mo ghra?

Hanger, still needs editing. Update soon.

I love the story-line and writing so please come back. If you need help with Irish/Gaelic translations or editing I can help too.

I love it stories stay up all nite to read them. Is there going to be more to come or is that it

Great stuff- this and its predecessors.May it continue soon and fluently into the conclusion the quality so far deserves.

It seems that you have lost interest, but I wish you would continue.

please continue!

A good story,but you need to get an editor and use spell check,you are using the wrong words for some things,,example,,,,,and you have to except(THIS SHOULD BE ACCEPT) that. I had love once and you took that away from me and nearly cost me my daughter. I will never give myself to you! You have to except(THIS SHOULD BE ACCEPT) this and maybe you can find your mate,and your comma's and periods are in the wrong places,making some of the sentences a big confusing,but the story line is good,and hope you will post more soon,

Are you going to post more chapters or no? I love this story I've read it more than once and would love to see where the story goes... please finish...