All Comments on 'Naughty Nurse'

Looking forward to a return visit and a chance to actually make him come with her lips...

Watch your tenses. You went from past tense to present tense and it was very annoying.

I would've enjoyed more detail. If you'd added dialogue between the two characters, described facial expressions, sounds, smells etc, that would've brought your story to life. It's definitely a story you could add another part to, but extra detail would make it a more enjoyable read.