All Comments on 'Negotiating with Your Sister'

Nicely done! You have a talent for writing and a woman's perspective to boot. Keep up the good work.

Good premise.

Needed to slow down with the sex.

Much too automatic.

Needed dialog about him wondering how good she is at blowjobs. And her telling him.

Needed more handling/edging his cock and balls before her cock attaches itself to his cock.

Three stars.

Will there be a 2nd chapter?

nice!!...ready for the next chapter with these 2!!

Good first story. Now finish it! 5/5

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Loved it!! Looking forward to seeing more of your stories. 👍

5 Stars. This needs to continue.

Going to be honest, I'm not always the biggest fan of short stories, but that was freaking awesome! I'd love to hear of future negotiations. And wouldn't he shit a brick if he found out she'd been negotiating with mom and dad already? This really was great. 5/5 well deserved stars.

Dewey Cheatham

I dug it

Great story!

REWRITE!!!!. The whole point of view thing made it heard to read. (you did this and you did that). No. Rewrite

Not sure how good story is only got couple paragraphs in but kept switching from 1st to 3rd person perspective with out being clear with switch made really hard to follow who was speaking as switch perspective every 5th word

Very nice short story. I love the way you write.

It's a good story, but writing in the secon person is usually a mistake, and it could be much better from either the first or the third. Four stars