by Harddaysknight
It's a 5'er to my bleary old eyes, I like the humor. Hero managed to stick it to everyone in sight but it's too bad about the jelly donuts, he could have shared with me - if he had coffee to go with'em.
Absolutely awesome. I started laughing and will every time I think about this.
Third (or maybe fourth) reading. Holds up almost as well as A&C's Who's On First, and inspires wondrously funny mental images. Would make an unforgettable SNL sketch.
Fifth go-round. Somehow it gets funnier each time. It's embarrassing, though, when I burst out laughing every time I see a jelly donut.
Not to be overly critical, but that dipshit Detective Cook, was recording their conversation BEFORE telling his suspect he was being recorded? That's a huge nono. Otherwise, the author's tongue is indeed firmly planted in his cheek.
I love it!! So funny, and the wife with her jelly donut dripping on her face must have been a real site.
Did Steve get his gun back from the police? It was a legally owned handgun.
I gave it 5 stars.
I am not a fan of alot of this authors stories a big to beta male for me but this was really really good. It's just a shame its more like a precis because a fully fleshed out exposition would be really awesome to read.
Well done Hardy's
I read all your stuff, and I have, with my tongue pressed firmly in my cheek. You have a "wicked" sense of humor and I enjoy it immensely. Commenters are often harsh with you and others, including me. I have but one thing to say to them...I give no credence to anything they post as "anonymous". It is a cowardly way to self-aggrandize themselves so they "feel" important. I will never post an anonymous comment. I love your work and read it often. RESPECT!
I have read this story three times and still laugh each time.
Well done - 5 stars,
Happy Frank
I don't know why I giggled all the way tru this, and it wasn't even funny, well yeah it really was funny. What's not funny about cops and donuts and unspoken agreements! Duh!
I loved it. Finally a husband who gets revenge on both of his wife's lovers, and doesn't end up in jail. The whole box of donuts thing is right on the nose, and funny as hell. I really enjoyed it, and have out it in my personal favorites.
I gave it 5 stars.
I was chuckling through it all. Can even picture the wife face down in the jelly donuts. Please write some more.
Him be one evil SOB, No? Delicious as the donut jelly dripping from his wife's nose.
Thanks for the laugh though perhaps I'm a tad weird for enjoying .......
The donuts should have been CREAM filled LOL. You missed an opportunity there.
Like the comments I've just read, I laughed my head off!!! Excellent short story, concise and well written!!!! 5*
Dobbin55
Just had 2 teeth pulled. Read this story and have a smile on my face. Go figure.......
Still the best 750 on the site!! Love to drop by for a quick laugh with this one
Really enjoyed this. Reminds me of a Roald Dahl short featuring a frozen leg of lamb.
So unfortunate that all his other stories are so cuckoldary in nature. This author has never met a beta male they don't love.
Hilarious!
An elegant contrivance for the sake of a humorous ending. 5 stars
Simply amazing, both the plot and the dialogue. Not to mention the concept of the unspoken agreement. Definitely 5*
Brilliant. Laughed through it all. I need to start using my 5 stars with discretion, and saving them for choice tales like this.
This is my 3rd time reading this for a good humor story.if I could vote again. I would guve it another 5 stars. EPIC
Very good, but why are you ignoring the STDs that are floating around throughout the story. If you're going to do a story, do it right. Address the issues, don't disrespect your audience to whitewash over them. If you're not confronting that issue or others, your endorsing them. There is no ethical neutral ground. Anything you don't stand against, you're allowing.