All Comments on 'On the Other Side of the Mirror Ch. 03/06'

Great stuff. Very much looking forward to next chapter.

This is very well written, and i hestitate to offer critique, but personally I'd be leery of using "you" in this way. I can see the effect you might be after but I'm not sure it works so well. Even so, its still a great story. Just my tuppence worth.

I agree with Gortmundy.

Using "you" it kind of ruin the perspective.

But, I agree also on that the story is very well plotted.

Good job