All Comments on 'One Hour with Sir Ch. 02'

OMG - indescribable. The short first piece sets the stage and grabs reader attention much like a movie trailer just as intended. The graphically intense, highly erotic sex scene is integral to this piece — no way gratuitous;the story is captured in the sex. Sex aside, this piece illustrates beautifully your ability to create believable, richly nuanced memorable characters that resonate with readers. You explore/reveal Cat as she reflects on, sees/feels her world: “I twisted the cap off the water and stood by the window, looking at the headlights of the cars far below and the street lamps illuminating the winding walkways in Central Park. I admired the people bustling about below, finding purpose in their lives. My purpose was singular, to please Sir.” And you flesh out the supporting cast like Marie, the waifish/comely blond (love her anonymity) and of course Anders/Sir; even marginal players like Trent and Norman feel real when engaged with Cat. The romantic ending came as a pleasant surprise, and upon a second reading you can easily see it happening. The last line is a perfect ending. Yes, you could explore/share more — would love to get to know Marie and the anonymous blond, but not necessary and might detract from what you’ve created here. Love it.

twist in the tale so who is the one getting dominated here?

Brilliant. Superb story telling.

That is a terrible ending. I thought she would have to face her fears and deal with her jealousy, but instead it snapped right back to traditional monogamous hierarchical crap. Ugh. The rest of the story was quite good though.