by MTLL
Pretty good story, although the change in tone towards the end with the abusive language was a bit jarring. I hope the future chapters are more in the vein of the first three quarters of this chapter.
I love this story, please, please, please continue. This is the first story I ever commented on. I'd love to read more from you.
Loved the general concept and the writing. Only marred by some basic errors, spelling, etc and the OTT comments from Julie about her Mom in the last quarter.