All Comments on 'One Sided'

Someone should post a list of lines in stories that can kill a boner.

The 2 in this story were: "she was sort of seeing another person. However, recently she was having doubts about pursuing a further relationship with the guy."

and

"her roommates were still up and they didn't like Jerry because of their past"

Too much baggage! Makes the protagonist sound like a desperate douchebag (for wanting to fuck another man's girl -as if there isn't plenty of pussy in the land! Might work well in the "loving wives" section where people with that fetish go but not really good for erotic couplings where people might come to avoid it..This is so specific to allow you to see it as constructive criticism, people like you keep the site going so thanks for contributing & keep up the good work : )