All Comments on 'Onyx Dreams Ch. 04'

This is good. Cryus has a good heart in order to offer taking Kennice's punishment for her, plus he must love her a lot. Great story.

Nice story line, but I'm done. As soon as you had them beating their own daughter, I lost all interest in this story and respect.

As parents, these two should have been barred from breeding. As a writer, you should have looked at the characters, the relationship and realised that it wouldn't work, nor be believable. Whilst every parent wants to protect thier child, and wants thier child to remain chaste for as long as possible, they also know that said child has a will and mind of said childs' own. So, in other words, just because your plot demands that they be strict parents, doesn't mean that it needs to be done. It's been badly written and badly handled. Sorry, you lose.

Well overall I like the plot the parents are a bit too harsh but I do enjoy the story :)