by chilemanTX
You keep switching between past and present tense. I'll use the last few paragraphs as examples.
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Vickie responds,... -- Present Tense.
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I asked... -- Past Tense.
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Yeah, it makes a difference. It's also not a "oh, I'm not a professional writer" matter.
I love to read stories such as this and it is so much of a turn on and positive influence on what I want to share with my wife.