All Comments on 'Out of the Snow Pt. 02'

Really good story, well put together. I’m not a fan of the switching narrator device because it spoils the flow, but it has its uses. Your English is really first class = there were one or two odd word usage examples, but you’ll really only lose those with a native English editor. The only thing I found problematic really was the use of the present tense, even mixed with a little switch to the past. This is, respectfully, a mistake. You almost never find novels written in present tense, and that’s because it reads stiltedly and is very difficult to get right. If you move to past tense throughout, your writing will improve by a huge step. 5 stars.