All Comments on 'Owned'

This could be injected into a story after a setup followed by a good finish. As it stands, this is just an interesting interlude between two consenting adults.

Thanks for sharing your efforts.

Great writing! However, there are many submissive, owned, and fully collared feminist women. These concepts are not mutually exclusive. So you might want to consider reworking your intro just a little (or maybe not, there's no rule that says your characters have to reflect BDSM culture and feminist theory). :-)

Regardless, you have a very nice style and I hope you expand the work!!!!!!!

Thank you for your comments. I had written this for a short story contest. It did well just not well enough. I think it is a full story in itself in that it has a beginning, middle, and end. However, I agree it could be made into a longer story. I also agree that the BDSM and Feminist aspect could in that longer story be explored more and yes I know very strong women and feminist who are subs and doms. I had to make a choice due to word count. This is a couple who are just playing with the idea of BDSM not committed to it yet. Perhaps the longer story could be about that journey. I'll see what happens when I sit down to write tomorrow. Thank you for your kind comments and suggestions.