All Comments on 'Oz Beach Boy with Abbie Chatfield'

Awesome story, as always. I think I've read every single one of your Matt adventures and always look forward to seeing new ones posted on here. :) . He's a great character and you're a very talented author.

I have one little piece of advice (and I only bring it up because you are such a strong writer). Don't use verbs such as "smile," "laugh," "frown" etc. as dialog tags. "You were right," I smiled, for example. Smiling isn't speaking. That phrase should be written, "You were right," I said, smiling.

"Yes," Abbie frowned. = "Yes," Abbie answered, frowning.

"That's right," I laughed. = "That's right," I mumbled, laughing.

It may seem knit-picking, especially on Literotica, as the point of the story is the fantasy, and your stories excel in delivering the fantasy. However, this series is strong enough to send to publishers. It's that good. If you take that route, the correct dialog tags will be important.

Keep up the great work. I look forward to reading more.

To the anonymous commenter: Thank you so, so much for your kind, kind words of encouragement and appreciation. I appreciate it deeply. It is a comment like this that prompts an author here to write more stories and try to improve with each one. Thank you also for your very thoughtful suggestions re dialogue descriptors. This has been enlightening and helpful. I will definitely address this in future stories. I already have a couple of stories fully written, but after these two, you'll certainly see your suggestions put into place. Thanks again for your thoughtful comments, and for spending so much of your time with my stories and characters. 🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏🙏

Hey Torso, Read this and thought of you! Enough material for a whole new story here LOL https://www.dailymail.co.uk/tvshowbiz/article-11931971/Abbie-Chatfield-flaunts-cleavage-crop-heads-morning-walk.html

Wonder if she reads these and is no getting more raunchy as a response? If so, well done!

Love it! Thanks so much! If there's even a remote chance my stories prompted Abbie to get even sexier, I'll take it! She is so hot! Thanks for the tip-off, that gave me a great giggle! 👍👍👍👍😍🤯 And thanks for reading too, it's much appreciated. 🙏🙏

Baretorso.. do I even need to say it? I’d been waiting for this follow up ever since I your first Abbie radio story.. and this sequel didn’t disappoint! Although I did enjoy the hospital striptease series whilst I waited..

Terrific follow up, thank you for taking my request! I do still feel there could be one more story in this radio studio setup…

With appreciation, an avid reader of yours - the general.

To General Sushi - so glad you enjoyed this follow-up! I had a great time writing it, so many, many thanks for the inspiration. Thanks for the kind words and encouragement. I'm definitely feeling that Abbie will pop up again somehow...

Always LUV a good titty-fuck!

@mybaretorso we need the next Installment of Abbie’s radio show!! Surely given the listeners hype for Matt, Abbie should run a fan competition for a lucky 5.. (maybe 10) winners to join abbie and Matt in the studio… for a live stripshow…just a thought (hope..)