All Comments on 'Paddleboat Entertainment'

Please rethink ever using that POV (Point of View) again. It is both childish and useless in that it simply doesn't work. Describing everything via a first person view, but including descriptions that could only come from the other party, is ridiculous. It requires being able to somehow describe what another person is thinking and experiencing and writing about it from your first person POV. As I stated, it doesn't work.

2nd person POV is not a good thing.

Just don't. What I read sounds like it might be a good story. Maybe rewrite it in a different POV.

NO READ,NO SCORE.

Thank you, and write on.

POV threw me off at first but I quickly adapted. Good story but might not be good for some men that might read it as the “You” of the story is a woman. Personally one of my favorites for something simple but I did want the man to be more involved and wanted them to go back. Interested in reading more from you though

Awful, even before second person.