All Comments on 'Pictures from Life Ch. 02'

a good story, but some of the words are out of place. you got Carol in the house before she rang the doorbell

Please go back an edit. Names change, wrong words etc, etc.

When are Amy and Mariah going to hook up on their own?

Dialogue's a little stiff, but story gives me some writing ideas. And that's what sharing is all about (NO barfing!)