All Comments on 'Pj Party'

Good read but it might be worth getting a proof reader

Spectacularly bad

She should hire an editor. Spelling,Syntax and usage errors. Takes you right out of the story. There,Their and They're all have a different meaning.

Straight out of a porno or an immature mind.

Good imagination….that’s what counts most!

Assuming English is not your native language. The correct usage is "they were," not "they was".