All Comments on 'Play Time'

this was really good but a little too fast. i would add more into it.

Proofread.

the story idea is simple minded. you have no idea of how to construct a complete sentence. punctuation is a romte concept that you have not come in contact with. from all aspects this is one of the worst stories i have ever read. that said, i would still eat your pussy and happily fuck you.

Hard to enjoy w/ all the grammar mistakes.

Try taking an english class @ night school.