All Comments on 'Porter's Pet'

YOUR SWITCHING FROM FIRST PERSON TO THIRD PERSON MAKES FOR DIFFICULT READING. I DID, HOWEVER, ENJOY YOUR STORY.

Panther's babe agrees that the switch from 1st to third is difficult, but as a sub this slut knows that a sub does not have a right to address herself in 1s person since she does not own her own body or have the right to speak of it

But the sub or not aspect has nothing to do with grammatical continuity. The story itself was very enjoyable, I really liked it. But I have to strongly suggest you resubmit a version of it that stays with either she, or I...distracts and breaks up the flow too much otherwise. And it's a good story and well deserving of the best possible presentation. So thanks for the fun read.