All Comments on 'Pretty Girl Bikinis'

I kinda got, but don't really get the story, the finish didn't help me to understand what was going on.

If you planned this to be a multi-part story, you should have put "Ch. 01" in the title so folks are prepared for you to stop writing before you finish the story. If that isn't your plan, let me just say FTDS!

More to come.

Pretty much a story with no beginning, no meat to the story and no conclusion and worthless to have read this. Maybe you have no attention span to know what you didn't start to finish. ADHD candidate on steriods.

Nicole's stats kept changing, even as quickly as the same paragraph. Overall, it is a good lead into a story which has potential.

I am confused although this is the first story you have written in about 18 years, I am hoping that this isn’t the full story and that there will be at least one more chapter to help explain this. It is an interesting premise and could be made into something incredibly erotic so I shall just wait and see if something comes next. Thanks for posting this.