by OppaiDragonWrites
So 8ve read the three chapters of this story. And it's quite interesting. I can definately see a lot of the core pulled from the the original. Though I'll say that this feels quite a bit more rushed than the last one. I feel like you have the time to slow doe a bit and really enjoy and explore things with these characters.
Perhaps also tone down a bit of the mind control aspects of things? It's very heavy handed in tis usage where I think it can use more subtlety.
Overall I'm really enjoying this story and looking forward to reading more chapters as they're released.
Liking this so far. I hope it doesn’t turn into any sort of harem or anything, I’d rather just have Venus and Celina
The story starts on the weird side pf fantasy which is cool enough but your obsession with extreme boob size really ruins the story.