All Comments on 'Retribution!?'

You have a penchant to switch from first to third person which makes reading this story somewhat difficult/irregular.

A few other items pop out, besides the girls breasts . . .

You wrote, and I suggest:

A little hesitant to kiss each other typically - would read more comfortably as typically a little hesitant to kiss each other/one another.

Broken table's debris / debris of the broken table : an inanimate object (table) cannot be possessive.

A bit of a wandering story that you will have to align to a fcous on what you need/want/might go looking for.

Please, read you work aloud, or have someone read it aloud to you. This will bring the irregularities to the surface. Or, perhaps an editor could help.

You do have a desire to provide written errotica and I do see a lot of potential for unbridled success IF you polished the works a bit.