by TCct
DNA test on his son? I really felt like we walked into the middle of the fourth quarter with this story. Therapist was talking out of both sides of her mouth. He shouldn't seek revenge, it was his fault, the wife wants to have her cake and eat it too! Thanks for the offering but, story wasn't well done IMHO
even if the dumb wife was just a prop and not a real character in the end.
Should be fantasy & science fiction.
Actually, the wife was a husbanf's dream! She balled like a whore, but didn't talk!
In most U.S. states, If the therapist proceeds to date/boink hubby right after the counseling session described in this story, she's facing loss of her license to practice, criminal prosecution, as well as resetting the court ordered husband-wife counseling sessions.
In addition, husband was painted as a real ass. Why any wife outside of science fiction would want to remain married to this jerk boggles the mind.
For your first story, four stars. Language, graamar, diction all good, story kept reader's attention, story had unusual surprise twist at end. (That the particular twist was fantasy will be accepted and not down-graded in first effort.)
Keep writing.
Why do cheating spouses wants to reconcile their marriages when they are the ones wreacks them?
Top marks
*****
It's not true. Studies show that happy wives in loving marriages are much less likely to cheat, especially repeatedly, but it still happens. Doesn't make it the husband's fault necessarily. What is odd here, is that wife is fighting the divorce, seeking counseling, and then doesn't participate. And she's still cheating. That doesn't make sense. Why force the issue if you aren't interested in following through? She wouldn't. Always ask yourself why your character does anything, especially if it is the foundation event for your story. It doesn't look like you did that here. Seems as if the only reason that she fought the divorce and demanded counseling was so that you could have a set up for your story. Good writing, but not the best story telling.
Absolutely unrealistic. Adolescent male fantasy material. Essentially a one sided rant. You didn't need any other characters in the story. Complete crap.
The title of my comment says it all! SHEEEEIITTT MAN
Thanks for sharing this Fantastic story with us!
Love you all! GREG.
OH 100 % OF READING ENJOYMENT BYE.
NEVER EVER FART AT AN UPSCALE RESTAURANT I DID UNFORTUNATELY IT
WAS LOUD AND STUNK (beer farts are like that) ANYWAY THIS PORTLY
GENTLEMAN NEAR OUR TABLE STARTED TO LAUGH AND HE STARTED TO CHOKE
ON WHAT HE WAS CHEWING ON! THEY CALLED E.M.T. PARAMEDICS AND ALL
HELL BROKE LOOSE HIS DRAGON BITCH WIFE WANTED TO SUE ME (what for farting)
THE OWNERS OF THE RESTAURANT SMOOTHED OVER WITH DRAGON BALL Z
NEEDLESS TO SAY MY WIFE WAS NOT IMPRESSED WITH ME
I WONDER IF YOU CAN CALL MY FARTS A TERRORIST ATTACK!? LUVS YA
All of it was great. The ending was FANTASTIC! !!!
GREAT JOB. THANK YOU
What a way to end the sham. Thanks for the funny story.
Of course it was his fault. Given her attitude at college he should never have married her.
Does he think leopards change their spots?
your back-up and stand-by is so close at hand, TK U MLJ LV NV
married a slut and she remained a slut. The surprise would have been if she had remained faithful. Hey, single guys, if you are fucking a girl who doesn't believe she is in an exclusive relationship with you, she's a slut or some variety of swinger/hot wife. Make your choices accordingly.
I want a girl
just like the girl
that married dear old dad.
Not a cunt like this.
Our hero deserves better.
I didn't even read after the first paragraph. Why would I want to read about an ignorant self opinionated loser.
What was the point? The wife wants counseling to save the marriage, but she's still fucking around? If he married a woman that stupid and selfish he got what he deserved.
And I went through something similar. I know your pain. And I know your rage. You are not done yet. I am Bob at besemer@outlook.com, if you want to ta8 o.olk
Amy is an unbelievably dumb bitch. Why even try to save the marriage? Good.on Chaz for exposing her duplicitous behavior and hitting on the Doc.
The kind of counseling Amy needs is not couples counseling. Whether she has maturity or emotional problems, she is pathologically incapable of fidelity. Run, do not walk, in the opposite direction!
Good story kept changing numbers of her partners
Keep it up
I will keep reading
Just look at what is going on right now in the country. Like in this story , politicians pas ridiculous laws, like no fault. As many have stated in other comments I have read. A wife could fuck an entire football team in plan view, no big deal, shes rewarded in court, could also force the husband unto counseling on his dime. the lawyers and judges are counting on repeat business , that's the purpose for light sentences. Its a good ole boys club, you scratch my back, Ill scratch yours. If the law wasn't so corrupt most of the politicians would be jail. My favorite line is from the movie SHOOTER, when the senator says to Boblee there are no democrats or republicans, just have and have nots.How true.
I really.like this author's style. He says it all in a few words. Great style.
I liked the story, but i'm not sure WHY the wife was fighting the divorce, especially if she was staying with another lover.
A great short story with an absolute killer ending. I am still laughing 30 minutes after reading it.
Why do the wives cheat and then fight so hard to keep the marriage. Amy couldn't stop cheating long enough to to MC.
Why? That's easy: Security. They fight to keep the safety net intact. To keep the gravy train from rolling out of the station. They go out and have their fun, then come home to the one who pays their bills, buys their trinkets, takes care of them when they're sick, etc. And often expects *less* out of them sex-wise than their lovers do in exchange for all that. Even the strong, independent, successful types who make double what their husbands do, or more, like having a butler at home they don't have to pay.
They can claim "love" and all that good stuff, but the reality is they don't really want to go back to the single life. They want the freedom it entails, but they usually aren't too thrilled about the being on their own aspect, especially if they've been married as long as the couple presented here has.
Harsh, but that's just how it is. When a serial cheater demands counseling, in fiction or in real life, it damn sure isn't out of love for anyone but themselves.
Leaving them crying on the floor is priceless. Another great burn from this author.
I mean, how is anyone burned here? She CLAIMS to not want a divorce but is actively cheating AFTER she is already caught. She's getting dick and will likely get $$ from the divorce. Clearly, she doesn't give a shit about her husband.
Yet she's in counseling. OK. Not really a plausible situation but so often used.
Women aren't the sobbing messes portrayed here. Why would she be? She already has a replacement for this guy.
Do NOT take legal (or marital) advice from a commenter who cannot spell ‘adultery.’
I have favorited this letter so I can find (and, yeah, plagiarize) it if I ever hit that situation.
5*. hope I don’t need to use it!
... it kept reminding me that this is a story contrived by a fiction writer and not a slice of reality.
But it was an interesting read.**
Just like some Sci-fi and FANTASY is.
*As already delineated by other commenters.
**Interesting enough to try another by the author.
Paul in Oklahoma
Entertaining, but not sure why Amy wants to contest the divorce, besides the fear losing her meal ticket (and if that was her concern, she could at least try not openly cheat while the process is still ongoing). Quite the sick puppy. Also, Bev sounds like a quack.
She had 5 lovers, and he is not allowed to have any? Where is the balance??
Amy is still spreading her legs, that the friend she is staying with is a new lover
LOL, I had to.
Psychologists, psychiatrists and 'family counsellors' are, as a general rule, themselves in need of 'professional help'.
After her views on not being exclusive when they were first together, how can be have ever contemplated marrying her, I lost interest after that. I gave it an undeserving 2*
A common thread in LW stories is ending a relationship with a slut in college only to meet years later and think she’s a misunderstood saint. Then he can’t understand when he’s blindsided with evidence of her reverting to type.
People can change I hear you cry, they can’t they really really can’t.
But hey it’s just a story.
Considering how you got a professional so wrong, this piece of idiocy, (which exposed that along with the fact that some think this is what they would say, sorry dipshits they wouldnt)" Revenge would let Amy know that you are only interested in hurting her back and that means there is no love or caring in you for her or the marriage." Ending this story for me.
Literally no one would say that. Clearly the brain damaged buy into every piece of idiocy a writer puts out even when totally off the mark.
Some people REALLY don't like marriage counsellors. Writing a story provides an excellent opportunity to explore that dislike. Methinks this author has revenge on his/her mind.
LWlurker
I have to define some concordances:
@skruff101- a leopard cannot change its gait or its spots;
@Helen1899- once frivolous, always frivolous;
@Legio_Pa_tria_Nostra- working with someone else's head and behavior requires unblemished character, straightness of personality and impartiality of judgment. It's difficult for someone to have it all together...;
@Deprived891- typical traitor behavior: selfishness. These people want it all;
And finally: @SystemShock- your explanation to @robroy93's argument, answered the entirety of fictional characters in LW stories and everyday life. Deep selfishness and lack of respect for the other are responsible for all this.
There would be many others, but I turned to the most recent ones.
I enjoy reading the works posted on LW. I'm not a BTB or RAAC fan. But I can't bear that. person betrayed, suffer beyond the condition that presents itself.
Being tied to a traitor, losing one's children or being forced to live almost in financial misery, always merits drastic action.
The MC of this story took his hammer well. He didn't burn his cheating wife, he just put his foot down, in her point of view, and left behind a life of deceit.
Although he himself sought scabies to scratch himself. But that's just my opinion.
The whole premise of them being in marriage counseling was a joke, especially since she was staying with one of her lovers. The storyline really went nowhere as the Amy character refused to contribute as a main character. 3 stars
Nice comical slam on court order reconciliation therapy. Can you imagine 6 lovers and the wife is so clueless as to think that the marriage can be saved. BTRH...
Uhhh...it's clear that rancher doesn't understand understand God dammed thing...
Great dialog. Even if the last few lines were tongue in cheek, I feel they let down the whole story.
"Ole Faithful" and "Bullshit and shenanigans"
I'm giving 5 stars just for that hilariousness.
The reasonings and common sense of our author's arguments in the counseling sessions are amazing. I wished I had the kind of thinking and reasoning in my only divorce some 40 years ago.
Very humorous and inciteful! 5 stars of course!
I forgot in my previous comment. This was really a great story for your first attempt. My congrats to you and any praise for those who may have helped editing or proof reading. Thank you.
Great first story. Whatever happened to her rings? And why did she insist on the counseling if she didn't want to stay married?
Other than Amy's lack of participation being the exact opposite of what she would realistically be doing, the story was very good for a first effort.
I love the backbone you give the men in your stories. The wishy washy husbands in far too many of the cheating wife stories have a mental profile more in line with women than a normal man. Were it not for men behaving as men, the human race would have disappeared millennia ago.
Beverley is a blot. But she's practical.
Amy is a blot. And she's likely to stay that way.
Chas is just blotting it up. Smart chap.
5
Beverly's professional ethics are disgraceful, but it is only a story and a pretty entertaining one,
Too few LW stories talk about the husband confronting the wife with threat of revenge sex. What's good for the goose...
Author is clever and effective, providing a very well crafted story via very talented dialogue.
I’m motivated to read his other work
Didn't feel there was quite enough emotions or details in the story. David had three but good outline.
⭐ I thought it was pretty good UNTIL we limped into another paraplegic closing with the therapist agreeing to enter into a "romantic" (read sexual) relationship with one of her patients. If this author intends to be taken in any way as serious or talented his stories cannot lean upon cute, stupid, and totally unrealistic endings. He might as well have had either character choose, after ending the "counselling", to enroll in Starfleet Academy and thereafter "boldly go where no man has gone before", and I don't mean trying to harvest cherries!
The motivations for the wife are so incomprehensible that it reads like comedy. Why bother forcing counseling (which btw, despite what loving wives authors tend to believe, is rarely ever granted when one spouse objects) if you're going to live with another man and screw him?